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Band 7.5

You found a lost item at the park and want to return it. Write a letter to the park manager. Describe the item Say where and when you found it Ask how to return it to the owner

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Dear Park Manager, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to report a lost item I found during my recent visit to the park and to ask for your assistance in returning it to its owner. The item I discovered is a small black leather
wallet
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. Inside, there are several credit and debit cards, a student identification card issued to someone named Omar Yuldashev, and a small amount of cash. The
wallet
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 appears to be in good condition, suggesting it was dropped quite recently. I found the
wallet
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 on Sunday, April 6th, at around 4 p.m. It was lying near one of the benches along the eastern trail, not far from the pond area. The spot was fairly quiet at the time, so I assumed the owner might not have realized they had lost it yet. I would appreciate it if you could advise me on the most appropriate way to return the
wallet
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. Should I bring it to your lost-and-found office directly, or would you prefer that I hand it over to the local authorities? I am more than willing to cooperate and follow whatever procedure is recommended to ensure the
wallet
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 is returned safely. Kind regards, Sardor Bekmurodov

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coherence and cohesion
The letter is well structured and presents the information clearly. However, in the closing, you might mention your contact information for the manager to reach you more easily.
task achievement
You did an excellent job of detailing the item and where it was found. Make sure to express your hope that the owner can be reunited with their belongings for a complete response.
positive
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the situation.
positive
The details provided about the wallet and its contents are clear and informative, which helps in identifying it.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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