The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the
the
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total percentages of
films
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released and selling tickets in both
years
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1996 and 2006.
Overall
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, drama
films
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comprised the largest proportion of the total in the two
years
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;
however
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, comedy
films
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were the hottest
sales
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in 1996 and 2006.
Whereas
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romance
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genre movies'
contribution
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contributions
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were comparable in the two
years
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, making up the smallest contribution. But
romance
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sales
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were higher in 1996 than
2006
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. In 1996, the figures
of
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drama movies presented
approxemately
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approximately
one fourth
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of the total. In comparison, in 2006,
this
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number
soured
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soared
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to 35%. On the other
hands
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, comedy shows constituted
one fifth
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in 1996, ten
years
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later the percentage increased by 5%. In the meantime, fantasy
films
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'
precentage
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percentage
were
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a fraction above 10% and the number of
films
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released escalated to around 15%.
Finally
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,
romance
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shows figures were the same in 1996 and 2006, comprising about 7% of the total. in 1996, drama
tickets'
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sales
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represented nearly 15%, the
sales
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underwent a slight increase by 2006, being about 16%.
In contrast
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selling
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made up 20% and 23% in 1996 and 2006 respectively.
Furthermore
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salement
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sales
was
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below 5% in 1996 and
it
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climbed to around 6% in 2006.
lastly
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,
romance
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audiences posed 5% of the total in 1996 but the numbers decreased to only 2% in 2006.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, years, sales, romance with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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