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Band 4.5

Some people think that newspaper are best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that internet is a better source.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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This
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 has been a debatable topic
between
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individauls
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individuals
since
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over
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past
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the past
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 decade
that
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apply
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wether
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whether
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 the
internet
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 is
best
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the best
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 media to know & learn about things or
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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. I have attempted to shed light on both these
view points
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 and
also
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 given my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
From
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past
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the past
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 2-3 centuries
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newspaper
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newspapers
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plays
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 a key role in proving and
tranferring
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transferring
 information between individuals. It is easily accessible in cities
as well as
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 villages as it is
tranported
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transported
through
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by
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 vehicles and press companies have their printing setups in
majority
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the majority
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 of areas. People can gain every day
latest
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the latest
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 news and information of what is happening not only
with in
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within
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 their town or country but all around the world. For
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instance
intance
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instance
, in
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research
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research
reasearch
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 it has been found that the people who
reads
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 regularly with concentration have great
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remembrance
rememberence
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remembrance
 power and
ability
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the ability
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 to
take
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make
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right
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the right
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decisions
desicions
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decisions
,
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,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 has become
necessity
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a necessity
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 for all working
proffesionals
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professionals
 and students. It is kind of a
wharehouse
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warehouse
 of each and every topic. Individuals can easily search
whatever
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for whatever
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 they need and they will get not only one answer but
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a variety
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 of results.
Due to
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 its development now people are studying virtually through
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prerecorded
recorded
pre-recorded
 lessons or online
session
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sessions
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. To illustrate, during
Covid 19
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 pandemic when all things were closed and
public
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the public
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 was trapped inside their houses.
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Internet
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The Internet
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 played
key
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a key
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 role by providing safety majors and
latest
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the latest
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 updates on time. In my opinion,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 is the best option to be considered.
Internet
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 takes seconds to get information
while
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 for
newspaper
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 we have to wait for a day.
Now a days
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 many
counrties
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countries
 have their own free public
internet
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. Age group can be
drawback
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 here that senior citizens are not used to
this
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 technology. In conclusion, Both
newspaper
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 and
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the internet
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internet
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 have their pros and cons but
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the internet
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internet
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 advantages
outweighs
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newspaper
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newspapers
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,

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language
Ensure to proofread your work to correct spelling errors such as 'individauls', 'wetther', 'best media', 'tranferring', and 'rememberence'.
coherence
When discussing both views, make sure each paragraph clearly focuses on only one view (newspaper in one paragraph and internet in another) for better clarity.
task achievement
In your conclusion, rephrase the key points more elaborately to summarize your arguments effectively.
content
You provided relevant examples from societal events, like the Covid-19 pandemic, which helped illustrate your views effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable sources
  • fact-checking
  • curated content
  • editorial process
  • delayed reporting
  • constraints
  • real-time updates
  • perspectives
  • information overload
  • editorial oversight
  • misinformation
  • critical evaluation
  • navigating
  • immediacy
  • breadth
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