Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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These days, one of the most crucial

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of using modern technology in our daily

life

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is some

people

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believe that it helps to make

better

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a better

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society

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some

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apply

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others

thought

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that

these

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are

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one of the main

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for creating distance between

people

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, I certainly agree that technologies are considered

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apply

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a boon to

brought

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bringing

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people

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together.

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with,

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considering effective communication in our busy

life

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, it becomes apparent that modern devices

such

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internet

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, mobiles and Wi-Fi

plays

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a significant role

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in maintaining

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communication within

shortest

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possible time which I agree.

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, with the help of social media

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as Facebook,

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and Twitter

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people

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from all ages are able to make friends globally and share their ideas which

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them to connect forever without visiting the place or country.

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this

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will create a

sence

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sense

of enjoyment by creating a virtual social

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at present and in

upcoming

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future.

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, some individuals thought that

people

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become more isolated in their personal

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life

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because of the excessive use of modern technology.

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, at present older

people

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stopped

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to the park or gym

for doing

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to do

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daily exercise as they bought modern and advanced indoor exercise

machine

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at home and continue

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, they are not only

loosing

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social interaction

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meeting lots of

people

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in the park but

also

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depriving themselves of enjoying fresh air which is

also

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essential to

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lifestyle. In summary.

while

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technological

advancement

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advancements

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sometimes make real friends or sometimes fake friends, I obviously believe that nothing can bid modern technology for getting

people

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together around the world.

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task achievement

Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both viewpoints and your position. It could benefit from a more structured approach.

coherence and cohesion

Try to present your ideas in a more organized manner, using clear paragraphs for each point. This helps with the logical flow of your essay.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure to proofread your essay for small grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, which can affect clarity and overall impression.

task achievement

Good attempt to discuss both viewpoints and provide your own opinion.

task achievement

You provided some relevant examples illustrating the impact of technology on communication and social isolation.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

connectivity
communicate
social media
virtual meetings
global community
isolation
distract
face-to-face interaction
personal connections
dependency
technology addiction
digital divide

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