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Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language when they are very young.Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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There is no one denying the fact that education is a crucial factor in our lives.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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 a young age, kids should begin learning new languages, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that families should encourage their
children
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 to learn a foreign
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since
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 a young age.
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 with, learning languages starts
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household
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 or school.
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, when kids learn a foreign
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 from school or home
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 will help them to expand their knowledge and enhance their communication skills which allows them to express their
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.
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, there are many ways to help parents to educate their
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new
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, but the best path is combining fun with education.
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, a survey conducted in Japan shows that 90% of
children
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 learn
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English
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language
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 through the games
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 as Minecraft. Another point to consider,
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 they want to explore a new culture in the future, they should learn its
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 because it will help them to engage in wonderful experiences. It will
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 allow them to make new friendships and when they practice the new
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 they learn with local individuals.
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, some people learn a foreign
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 because they want to study or work in other countries.
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, 50% of Saudis learn
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English
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language
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 because they want to study in a foreign country. So helping
children
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 learn a foreign
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 like
English
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 will help them achieve all the about and save a lot of time for them in their future. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that parents should encourage their
children
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 to learn global languages
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 as Arabic,
English
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 and French to help them in future work or study.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing more balanced arguments or addressing opposing views to enhance your task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to improve logical flow and clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples that support your main points, especially regarding children's learning through games.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main arguments and reiterates your opinion clearly.
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