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You recently did a cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cooker course you would like the school to offer

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Dear
course
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 director, I completed my basic cooking
course
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last
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 month, which
i
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 loved a lot and
i
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 want to thank you for offering that class. The unique
matheds
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methods
 were very impressive. Because of
cookery
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the cookery
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course
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now
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i
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 can help my mother in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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,
infact
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in fact
,
i
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 prepare
atleast
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at least
 one meal
everyday
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 for my family and they really like my food. And the best part now
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is i
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i
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 can teach my younger cousins new
recipies
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recipes
 and
eassy
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easy
 ways to cook healthy snacks.
however
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,
i
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 just want to give you a small advice if you can provide
advance
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advanced
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 cookery
course
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 to us. I would like to join
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 classes, where
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 can learn baking and fancy meals. I am looking for your positive response. Your
sincearlly
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sincerely
 Ash

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas into clearer paragraphs. For instance, separate your enjoyment of the course from your cooking experiences and suggestions for the future.
task achievement
Pay attention to spelling and grammar, such as 'methods' instead of 'matheds' and 'sincerely' instead of 'sincearlly'. This will make your writing more professional.
task achievement
Your enthusiasm for the course and your cooking progress is evident, which helps engage the reader.
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You've made specific suggestions for future courses, showing your interest in continuing your culinary education.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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