The first chart below shows the number of airline crew (pilots, stewards etc) needed to fly a passenger plane between Australia and a number of other countries. The second chart shows the number of passenger complaints per plane journey made on these routes, and average kilogram (kg) weight of luggage (or baggage) carried per passenger.

The first chart below shows the number of airline crew (pilots, stewards etc) needed to fly a passenger plane between Australia and a number of other countries. The second chart shows the number of passenger complaints per plane journey made on these routes, and average kilogram (kg) weight of luggage (or baggage) carried per passenger.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first chart below shows the number of airline crew (pilots, stewards etc) needed to fly a passenger plane between Australia and a number of other countries. The second chart shows the number of passenger complaints per plane journey made on these routes, and average kilogram (kg) weight of luggage (or baggage) carried per passenger.
A glance at the figures given illustrates the
amount
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of aircraft crew on each plane by destination
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the
amount
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of passengers'
complaints
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per flight journey and
average
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an average
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weight of luggage carried. Based on an
overall
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perspective, it can be seen that
Germany
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's
airplane
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has the highest
number
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of crews,
while
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New
Zealand
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has the lowest
number
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of crews. Meanwhile, from the second figure, New
Zealand
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has the highest
amount
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of
passengers'
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passengers
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complaints
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, whilst
Germany
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has the least
number
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complaints
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of complaints
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.
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,
Germany
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has the heaviest
luggages
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luggage
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per passenger, but New
Zealand
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has the lightest
luggages
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luggage
pieces of luggage
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per passenger. From an initial figure,
Germany
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attains the first
position
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for the
amount
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of
airplane
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crew by 15
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percent
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per cent
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. The following places are
Indonesia
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at 11
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percent
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per cent
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and Malaysia at 8
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percent
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, respectively. New
Zealand
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obtains the
last
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position
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by 6
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percent
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. From the
last
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figure, New
Zealand
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achieves the first
position
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at 6
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percent
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per cent
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. The subsequent positions are Malaysia and
Indonesia
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, which are at the same percentage by 3
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percent
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per cent
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.
Germany
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gets the
last
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spots
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at 2
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percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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,
Germany
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reaches the first place at 38
percent
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. The next places are
Indonesia
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at 32
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percent
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per cent
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and Malaysia at 30
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percent
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per cent
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. New
Zealand
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obtains the
last
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place at 15
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percent
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per cent
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.
To sum up
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,
Germany
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has the highest
position
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for
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number
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a number
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of crew and passengers
complaints
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.
In addition
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,
Indonesia
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has always been the second
position
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for all these categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, complaints, germany, number, zealand, position, percent, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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