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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015
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The bar chart illustrates a number of key figures of families based in the US by their yearly
salery
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salary
sales
 throughout different
years
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.
Overall
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, 100,000 or more dollars has shown
dominace
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dominance
 in all given decades,
whereas
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 75,000-99,999 remained to be the least accounted income. 
According to
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 the provided information,
the
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apply
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wage of less than $25,000 showed minimal changes as in the year 2007 25
million
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has
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had that
salery
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salary
.
Additionally
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, by the
years
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 2011
as well as
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 2015 it was a little under 30
million
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.
Similarly
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, incomes ranging
$
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from $
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25,000-$49,999 recorded a little under 30
million
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 in all centuries. In terms of $50,000-74,999
salery
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salary
, it illustrated almost negligible fluctuation in which it was always a little over 20
million
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 in number.
In addition
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 to that, the $75,000-99,999 income accounted
the
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for the
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 same manner as the former, where it was kept under 15
million
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throughtout
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throughout
 the
years
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, except for the life 2015
where
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when
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 it
finally
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 reached 15
million
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housholds
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households
.
Finally
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, the $100,000 or more
protraits
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portraits
 the biggest alteration. As in the
years
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 2007 and
2011
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2011,
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 not much change was noticed having recorded a little under 30
million
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 families but by the year
2015
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2015,
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 that number accelerated becoming a little under 35
million
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 households.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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