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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The line graphs compare the values in Australian
dollars
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 of Australian trade with three different countries
throughtout
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throughout
 the period from 2004 to 2009.
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,
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while
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the three graphs exhibited different trends over the given period. the amount of the increasing and decreasing
vaired
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varied
 between the all countries, where Japan and the US stayed the same.
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, the increase
were
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 witnessed by China. As the graph shows,
in
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at
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 the
beggining
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beginning
 of the period China imported just under 20
Billion
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dollars
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, over the years its line rose consistently
untill
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until
 2008 accounting
30
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for 30
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Billion
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then
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 the year afterwards the
imports
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 remained stable
in
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2009. Yet, exports were under the
imports
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 at
first,
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with almost 12
Billion
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dollars
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were
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exported by
china
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China
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 in 2004. Followed by,
a
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the
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 same pattern of growth reaching 20
Billion
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dallers
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dollars
 sharp, in 2007.
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 the figure rose rapidly in the
last
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 two years
with
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 approximately 35
Billion
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.
In contrast
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, in 2004
japan's
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Japan's
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 exports and
imports
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 were identical with 20
Billion
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. The number of local manufacturing remains steady. In 2008, it slightly rose by 2
billion
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then
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 back to its start.
However
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, exporting in Japan
is fluctuated
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fluctuates
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. It commenced with 20 after that, reached just under 30 in 2007, hitting a top point at 40
billion
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dollars
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 and the line went down in 2009 to 30 million. A similar event to
Japna's
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Japan's
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imports
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with
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from
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 the United States. Where exports and
imports
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 did not change till 2009 with 10 B and 20 B, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, billion, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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