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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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A glance at the figures given illustrates the Australian trading
activities
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 with Australian dollars as its value in the three different states from 2004 to 2009. Based on
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overall
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the overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that the highest position for import
activities
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 was China in 2008 at A$ 25
billion
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,
while
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 Japan attained the first position for export events in 2008
by
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at
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 A$ 40
billion
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. From an initial figure, there was a gradual increase of about A$ 2
billion
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 from 2004 to 2009 in import and export
activities
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 to China. They reached
its
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their
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 highest position in 2008 for imports at A$ 25
billion
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 and in 2009 for
exports
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 at A$ 32
billion
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.
For the
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The
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 following figure,
it
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is a line chart of Australia's trade with Japan. From 2004 to 2008, the trading events
had
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fluctuated for
exports
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, but it remained stable for imports. The
exports
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 started at A$ 20
billion
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 in 2004,
then
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it enhanced
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increased
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 to around A$ 25
billion
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 in 2007.
Subsequently
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, it had
significant
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a significant
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increased
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 and reached its peak in 2008 by A$40
billion
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.
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, it decreased considerably in the next year. The import trades remained stable at around A$ 20
billion
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in
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apply
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each year. The next line chart is trading with
United
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the United
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 States which shows the trading between these countries stayed the same at around A$ 20
billion
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 for imports, whilst
exports
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 remained unchanged at around A$ 10
billion
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.
To sum up
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, Australia's
economy
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activities
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 with China had gradual enhancements, but with
United
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the United
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 States had
stable
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a stable
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 amount. Meanwhile, the
economy
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economic
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activities
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 with Japan had
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 trading.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, billion, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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