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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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represent
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 the money generated by foreign trading activities between
Australia
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 and three different nations from 2004 to 2009. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that, only with China,
Australia
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 had an upward trend in both exports and imports.
On the other hand
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,
Australia
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’s trade with The United States remained stable over the years. Focusing on
the
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China and
Australia
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, the figure
of
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for
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Australia
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Australia's
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import
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imports
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 exceeded its
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export
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exports
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 by 10
billions
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billion
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 in 2004.
This
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export
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 continued to grow dramatically and reached the peak
at the end
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 of the period at 30, after surpassing the statistics
of
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for
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import
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imports
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 at 28 in
the
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late 2008. Turning to the rest of the categories, The United States and
Australia
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 reported an unchanged trend at around 20 and 10, for imports and exports, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the number of
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export
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exports
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 and
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import
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imports
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 with Japan touched at the same level at 20 in 2004 but rose rapidly for
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export
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exports
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 and remained
unchange
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unchanged
 for
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import
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imports
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 in the
obserbed
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observed
 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, import, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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