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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table shows the
rate
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 of
employment
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 and education, and the average yearly
income
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 for eight European countries in 2015.
Overall
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,
Norway
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 had the highest
employment
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 and education rates and
annula
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annual
income
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 among the
countriest
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countries
 given,
while
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 Greece and Bulgaria had the lowest rates. The percentage of employees between the ages of 16 to 64 years was around
three thirds
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three-thirds
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 in
Norway
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, which was the highest percentage. The UK follows with 72.7
percent
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per cent
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 of
employment
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. Meanwhile, Bulgaria, Latvia, Luxembourg, and
Portugal
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Portugal's
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employment
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rate
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 did not exceed 70%.
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, Greece had the lowest percentage of workers in 2015. With regards to the
rate
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 of
indivduals
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individuals
 with a college or university education,
Norway
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 had 43.2
percent
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per cent
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, which is the highest
rate
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,
while
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 Portugal's significantly lower ( 22.9%).
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, the average yearly
income
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 in
Norway
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 was 41,483, double that of the UK. Bulgaria's
annula
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annual
income
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 was around 3,332 in 2015, which was the least among the European countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, employment, income, norway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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