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Band 7

Some people think that local authorities should control where building can be constructed. Others thinks that everyone should be free to build where they like without permission. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often believed that local institutions should manage the town planning process in underdeveloped areas of the city,
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 others claim that it is unnecessary to put strict restrictions on construction companies.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and in the end, I will present my partial opinion. On one hand, some believe that the
government
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 should provide rules and guidelines regarding mapping of untouched territories of the city, and encourage local administration to assist in locating the areas where the buildings can be constructed thereby streamlining the process of planning the project for the particular location.
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, the Newsletter of the “National Development Authority” is published every month in which architects share their ideas regarding upcoming construction projects,
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this
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 reason, I agree that consultation with local authorities is the best approach for building a new construction.
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, others claim that
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government
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 officials are not helpful, and often don’t respond to requests from bidders.
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 is to say, that people
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 accuse local authorities of being biased toward their own interests and that they are being bribed through illegal means.
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, most of the projects advertised by the
government
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 are funded by private companies so that they can take advantage of the public sector.
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, a survey published by “Dawn magazine” in which the pollster stated that almost 40 to 45% of under-constructed areas of the city are under the control of land mafias backed by real estate tycoons.  In conclusion, I believe that the most effective way to tackle
this
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 problem is by reducing the communication gap between the
government
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 and private companies which helps to increase productivity by improving the quality of services to consumers.

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task achievement
Your introduction outlines the topic well, but make sure to clearly state your opinion more definitively. This will strengthen your position in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The transition between paragraphs is good, but you can enhance it further by using linking phrases to connect ideas more smoothly.
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While you provided some examples, consider adding more detailed specific examples that support your arguments in both viewpoints to create a more compelling case.
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Your essay presents a clear understanding of the topic and effectively discusses both sides of the argument, demonstrating a balanced perspective.
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The use of relevant examples, such as the survey from 'Dawn magazine', adds credibility to your arguments and makes your points more compelling.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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