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You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and In poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: say what the problems are explain how a new fence will solve the problems suggest that the neighbour pays half of the cost ​ You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear Mr. Dhillon, You’ve been a very cooperative and reliable neighbour through the years. And here I am writing to see what can be done with the broken
fence
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 between our houses, which enables your cat and dog to enter my property. Being a
pet-lover
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pet lover
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, I adore your babies.
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, it's quite inconvenient when they
cross-over
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cross over
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 your garden by the
fence
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 and come into my yard—where my baby boy spends most of his time playing. He gets scared easily from any of the animals and he’s got these fur allergies that caused him to be admitted
in
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to
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 hospital
last
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 week. Sometimes, it’s not possible for me to be around him and I’m afraid he might get sick again because your pets occasionally
come-over
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come over
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 through the wide hole in the
fence
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. Not only it’s a nuisance for us, but
while
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 running they
also
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 trample over the plants in your garden adjacent to the wall.
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, I am
purposing
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proposing
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 to replace
this
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 outdated and fragile wooden
fence
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 with a metal one. It’s not going to cost much if we both share the costs. I am looking
to
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forward to
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 receiving your confirmation or any other possible alternative for
this
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 issue. Yours sincerely, Simran

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coherence and cohesion
While your letter generally follows a logical structure, consider adding clearer transitions between some of your points to improve overall flow.
task achievement
Make sure to be specific about how much you anticipate the costs will be for the new fence. This can help your neighbor in making a decision.
tone
Your friendly tone and appreciation of your neighbor's pets is a nice touch, which makes the letter approachable and warm.
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