In recent years, many local shop owners have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter to bring your attention towards an issue that we have been facing for a long time.Transport conditions are worsening day by day.I am a local resident of the city of Sialkot, and we have only one bus stand in the whole city. I do agree with

this

Linking Words

notion that it's a small city but there is a large number of passengers who use public transport daily. Unfortunately, the buses are in the worst condition. Their metal bodies are fully rusted and the seats are extremely uncomfortable. Technical issues are always in the queue.The majority of people use public conveyance to reach their schools, universities and their job destinations. Private taxi fares are very high, it is impossible for citizens to hire private cars. These problems in public transport are affecting people's daily routines.

Moreover

Linking Words

, there is no roof on the waiting area of the bus stand.

Although

Linking Words

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

I do not use it most often, it is difficult for elders to wait

while

Linking Words

standing. It's my humble request to introduce some new buses on these routes so that folks can easily cover their journey. Bus fares must

also

Linking Words

be reduced so that the burden is lowered on passengers. As far as the roof of the waiting area is concerned, our local council can contribute some money for its construction. Waiting for prompt action from your side! Yours faithfully, AR

ayeshariaz168Sun Apr 13 2025

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement

Consider providing a clearer introduction that explicitly states the issue at hand and why it is important.

coherence and cohesion

Try to add a brief conclusion summarizing your main points or reiterating the request.

task achievement

Be more specific with examples of the technical issues faced by the bus system to strengthen your argument.

task achievement

You effectively communicate your concerns and make a clear request for action, showing a good understanding of the problem.

coherence and cohesion

Your use of paragraphs helps in organizing your ideas, making it easier for the reader to follow your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

235 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at museum. Writing a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntery/unpaid work. In your letter . explain why you want to do voluntery/unpaid work at the museum . describe some skills and qualities you have that would be usful . give details of when you would be available for work.
I trust this letter finds you well. I am writing to discuss a potential unpaid job opportunity at the museum. Allow me to elaborate on my strategy in response to your proposal.
7
band
the use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society
The idea of social media having replaced the role of direct communication is gaining more traction in society. While this has admittedly certain benefits, I would contend that these are overshadowed by the drawbacks.
6.5
band
The advantages provided by English as a global language will continue to outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement
Nowadays, the majority of countries are using the English language as an essential or second language. The English language may provide numerous benefits in the world such as facilitating communication between other countries easier compared to the past and improving the ability to think. In my opinion, this language might continue to overcome the negatives.
7.5
band
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about how governments should measure their countries’ progress. While some people consider economic development to be the most significant consideration, I would argue that advancements in other areas are crucial as well.
7
band
Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is believed by certain commoners that the government has wasted a huge amount of money on culture and entertainment. Instead, public services should be invested in these budgets. I partially agree with these statements. As a result, I would like to discuss this issue and clearly explain my opinion.

In recent years, many local shop owners have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

the use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society

The advantages provided by English as a global language will continue to outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?