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The graph and table below give information about water use world wide and water consumption in 2 different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use world wide and water consumption in 2 different countries.
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The line graph illustrates
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the use
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 of
water
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 in three different sectors from 1900 to 2000 in the world. The table compares
Brazil
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,
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 and the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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due to
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water
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 consumption in 2000.
Overall
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,
although
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 all three categories increased over the given period,
agriculture
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 required more
water
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 every year, and
Brazil
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 was more than
Congo
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 in all categories. Moving to a more detailed analysis, in 1900, the amount of
water
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 used in
agriculture
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 stood at 500 km³,
whereas
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 industrial
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 and domestic
use
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 accounted for 0. Global
water
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use
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 by
agriculture
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 increased to approximately 1000 km³ and the other two sectors rose slightly to just over 0 by 2000. Following 50 years, the amounts of
water
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 allocated to
agriculture
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, industry, and domestic
use
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 continued increasing and finished the period at 3000km³, more than 1000km³, and 500km³, respectively. With regard to the table, the population of
Brazil
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 was 176 million, compared to the number of people in the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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, accounting for 5.2 million in 2000. The rate of irrigated land in the former (26,500 km²) was 26.5 times higher than in the latter (100 km²).
Water
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 consumption per person in
Brazil
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 made up 359 m³,
while
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 it was just 8 m³ in
Congo
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, brazil, congo, agriculture, km³ with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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