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Band 5

You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

Dear Sabby, Hope you
find
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are
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 in good health and prosperity. I am very
existed
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exited
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 to share
a good news
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good news
a piece of good news
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 with you that
finally
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i
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I
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 have
been
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moved to my new house which
i
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I
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purchsed
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purchased
last
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 month.
Its
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It's
It is
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 a
double story
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double-story
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 home with a studio basement. It has four bedrooms, three washrooms,
big
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a big
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 living area and a dining hall.
Their
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There
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 is plenty of space
at
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in
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 the backyard with a
mid size
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mid-size
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 pool for parties and fun.
Also
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, huge
drive way
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driveway
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 to adjust
atleast
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at least
 four cars at a time and two in the garage as well. Talking about the locality and neighbourhood, it
fells
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feels
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 quite a piece over as
this
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 home is
at
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on
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 the outskirts of the city. Alongside there is
big
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a big
the big
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 park at the front of the house including
amenties
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amenities
 like swings,
basketball
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a basketball
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 court etc. So,
i
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I
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 invite you to come and see my house
on
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at
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the
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apply
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next week's celebration party. Hope to see you soon Best Regards Raj Question

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grammar
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'existed' instead of 'excited' and 'fells' instead of 'feels'.
coherence
Try to include smoother transitions between ideas. For example, linking sentences about the house and the neighborhood more clearly would strengthen the letter.
task achievement
Explain more about why you want your friend to visit, possibly mentioning something specific about the celebration party that would make them interested in coming.
task achievement
You provided a clear description of your house and mentioned several appealing features, which creates a vivid image for the reader.
task achievement
The invitation to your friend was friendly and enthusiastic, which is likely to encourage them to visit.
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