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The popularity of social media has led to a rise in “Instagram tourism”, where people travel to destinations primarily for the purpose of taking photos and sharing them online. Discuss the causes and effects of this trend.

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Todays
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, the
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 of
people
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use
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who use
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 social media
is
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has
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increase
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 significantly.
People
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also
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use to
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post anything that they like so they have many
resion
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reasons
 go anywhere to
taking
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take
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a photo
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photo
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photos
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. Someone
like
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 to upload
the
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picture
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pictures
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about
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of
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 their life,
their
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and their
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 trip to have more contact and be famous.
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, the others like to share the tips of doing something for everyone.
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, they can dance or do
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whatever
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 they can to be famous or have more relationships like the others. And now, the most popular is
upload
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to upload
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 photos with a beautiful background so that
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 the content creator or anyone
like
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likes
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go
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 to many different places to have the best pictures. I think that the
thing
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things
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 a lot of
people
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 doing will have effects,
it
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they
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 can be small, can be big. Like the place that
people
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 go to take
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a photo
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photo
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photos
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, and post
it
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them
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in
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on
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 Instagram so many
people
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 see
it
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them
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 and go. But some
people
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 don't have
knowledge
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the knowledge
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, so they put the
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litter
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 anywhere
so
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it
harm
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harms
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to
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the environment. In
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conclusion
condusion
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confusion
, the way
people
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taking
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take
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photo
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photos
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 or post
in
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 Instagram is not bad but they need to protect the place that they go and make it more beautiful, so they can have more pictures

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You have identified some relevant causes and effects related to Instagram tourism.
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Your essay demonstrates a personal perspective on the topic, which adds a unique touch to your response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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