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The diagram below show the changes that have taken place west park secondary school since its construction in 1950

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place west park secondary school since its construction in 1950
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The diagram shows the redevelopment of secondary
Use synonyms
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
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 between 1950 to 2010.
Over
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Overall
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all
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all,
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it is clear that
Linking Words
 the place
undergo
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undergoes
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alot
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a lot
 of changes for
the
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apply
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all period.
TO begin
Linking Words
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withe
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with
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 in 1950 The map had
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School
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Schools
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 and opposing the
school
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 houses
was
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were
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 located.
Linking Words
Also
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Also,
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 there are two
phslity
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falsity
 adjacent
the
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to the
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school
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wiche
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which
 is
playground
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a playground
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 and
sports
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a sports
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 field.
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Withe
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With
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 time we show a major change, they demolished the houses and
rebuild
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rebuilt
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 a car parka and science book in
the
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apply
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1980. After 30 years in
2010
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2010,
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 the sport field merged
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withe
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with
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playground
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the playground
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 and, the car park
tiake
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took
the a
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the
an
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 old location for the field
wiche
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which
 made the size
for
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of
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car
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the car
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 park significant
campers
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to campers
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withe
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with
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 other phsiltey.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, withe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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