Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether
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or in the
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believe that
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in the
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is better ,
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others
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prefer to live in the
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will discuss both views and give my own opinion. Some
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believe that live in the
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and they can do anything
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they
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city we
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her house
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our house .
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, we feel happy when we visit her and we
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together,
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we can go any place with a little time . When I was in the
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the
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most of them .
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, other
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prefer to live in the
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because it
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them more
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for work.
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, my mother looking for
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jobs
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countryside
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so we were moved to live here , and we
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a good school and teachers
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I enjoy shopping with my mother
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because
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because
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more
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modern
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, we were
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more
effective and we had a lot of friends
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that
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us to get good relationships. In my opinion, I prefer to live in the
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because it
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special
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like school , jobs ,
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and restaurants
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, and I love life like
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language
Make sure to phrase sentences correctly. For instance, instead of saying 'live in the city is better', you could say 'living in the city is better'.
content
Try to provide more supporting details for your points. For example, give clearer reasons why living in the countryside offers more job opportunities.
cohesion
Connect your ideas more smoothly. Using linking words can help improve the flow of your essay, such as 'In addition', 'Moreover', or 'However'.
content
You introduced the topic clearly and stated your intention to discuss both views, which is a good start.
content
You shared personal experiences, which adds a relatable touch to your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan areas
  • economic opportunities
  • career advancement
  • healthcare facilities
  • cultural diversity
  • countryside
  • tranquil environment
  • cost of living
  • close-knit communities
  • rural areas
  • housing affordability
  • social amenities
  • employment prospects
  • cultural vibrancy
  • hustle and bustle
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