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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the outcome of a survey conducted to find the main factors for using their
phones
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 from 2016 to 2019.
Overall
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,
charts
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the charts
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 show four main reasons, there are social networks, email, digital
camera
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cameras
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 and
phone
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phones
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, in which using
for
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apply
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social networks has the highest proportion and phone
call
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calls
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 has the lowest figure in four years.
Look
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Looking
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 at the similarities, between 2016 and 2019 share the same pattern, the biggest percentage says that social networks
is
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are
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 the most main reason for using their
phones
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: 50% in 2016, 48% in 2017, 51% in 2018 and 56% in 2019. And email is the second main reason for using with 25% in 2016, 24% in 2017, 20% in 2018 and 19% in 2019, data decreasing
year
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 by
year
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. In four years, many people use
phones
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 with digital
camera
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cameras
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,
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that
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which
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 is increasing
year
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 by
year
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. In
details
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detail
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, 15% in 2016 and increasing to 20% in 2019.
On the contrary
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, neither of using for call
phones
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descreasing
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decreasing
 from 13% in 2017
down
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to
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 5% in 2019.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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