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The chart below shows the number of students from four different countries, applying to a European university.

The chart below shows the number of students from four different countries, applying to a European university.
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The bar chart illustrates how many
students
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 applied to a European university from four different
countries
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 between 2004 and 2008.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that
although
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 there was a gradual decrease in the number of
students
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 from China, that of
students
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 from other
countries
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 increased over the given period. Moving to a more detailed analysis, in 2004, the quantities of learners from China and America stood at 27000 and 20000, respectively. 2005 saw a slight decline of 5000 in both
countries
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. The rate of American
students
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 rose
17000
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 in 2006, before hitting a low of 10000 in 2007 and during
this
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 period that of Chinese
students
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 remained stable, at 17000.
Afterthat
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After that
, the number of
students
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 from America reached its highest level 27000 and that of Chinese
students
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 declined to 15000. With regard to the other
countries
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, the numbers of Japanese and Russian
students
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 accounted for about 5000 in 2004. Following three years, both rates increased to approximately 10000. In 2008, the
quantity
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number
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 of
students
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 from Japan continued rising and finished
period
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the period
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 at 10000,
whereas
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 that from Russia decreased to 3000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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