The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart
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illustrates
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illustrates
how the number of enquires
vary
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that the Tourist Information Office
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received
recieved
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received
in a city from
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January
Januany
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January
to Jun
in
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2011
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, the
enquives
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enquiries
in person have an upward trend
while
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the
the
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use of
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the letter
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letter
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letters
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, mail,
telephone
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and telephone
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have
an a
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down
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downward frond. The
enquines
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enquiries
of a person started at just
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appear
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apper
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400 in the first mount
the
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and
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slightly
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to 800 in March, overcame the
the
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use of letter and mail, before a big increase to about t8 1900, became the most popular way. In terms of
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and mail, it came
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small
from
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approximately
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approximately
750 in January to 700 in March. and,
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it
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strongly to about 390 in May and
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maintained
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this
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value until the
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month. month. Meanwhile, the demand
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telephone
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increased to 1000 in March,
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except
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for a small decrease in February and keep it data until a big incline to 1600 which started
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April.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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