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the bar chart displays the percentage of people who ate fast food in five countries in 2020. country A 70% country B 65% country C 50% country D 49% country E 30%

the bar chart displays the percentage of people who ate fast food in five countries in 2020. country A 70% country B 65% country C 50% country D 49% country E 30%
The bar chart provides key information about
fast
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the fast
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food
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consuming
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consumption
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 rate for five
countries
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 in 2020. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
country
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 A and
country
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 B sectors had the largest
food
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 consumed.
In addition
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,
country
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 E saw the lowest percentage,
whereas
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,
countries
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 C and D remained dominant.
According to
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 what is shown,
country
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 A had the highest percentage at around 70% of
food
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 consumption, the proportion of
country
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 B followed closely at about 60%.
By contrast
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,
country
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 E had the lowest rate, with only around 30% of its population eating fast
food
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.
Country
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 C had approximately 50%,
while
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country
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 D showed a similar rate, slightly below 50%. The chart
highlight
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highlights
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 a clear trend: fast
food
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 consumption was much higher in certain
countries
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.
Overall
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,
countries
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 A and B stood out with
a
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apply
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significantly higher
precentages
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percentages
percentage
,
while
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country
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 E remained the least
precentage
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percentage
 over
2020
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the 2020
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 year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, countries, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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