The pie chart below shows the breakdown for revenue streams for average international football team. The table shows the age distribution of football fans attending the matches of three teams.

The pie chart below shows the breakdown for revenue streams for average international football team. The table shows the age distribution of football fans attending the matches of three teams.
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The pie chart demonstrates how an average international
football
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team earn
money
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from different sources. The table gives information about
age
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the age
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of
football
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fans
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who go to matches in three countries.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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broadcasting rights
is
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the biggest part of income for
football
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teams.
Also
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, most
of
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apply
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football
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fans
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in Ukraine and Ethiopia are older,
while
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in Argentina there are more younger
fans
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. Most
money
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come
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comes
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from broadcasting rights 52%. Match day revenue is 22%, and sponsorship
give
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gives
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12%. Transfers and merchandise both give 5%, and prize
money
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is only 4%. In the table, Ukraine and Ethiopia have many older people. In Ukraine, 40%
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fans
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of fans
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are 40 to 60, and
also
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40% are over 60. Only 5% are under 20. In Ethiopia, 50% are 40 to 60, and 30% are over 60. Argentina is different 35% are 20 to 40, and 10% are under 20. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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football
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teams mostly get
money
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from TV rights. Aged people watch
football
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more in some countries, but in
Argentina
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Argentina,
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there are more young people who go to stadiums.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words football, money, fans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • revenue streams
  • broadcast rights
  • merchandising
  • sponsorships
  • ticket sales
  • age distribution
  • demographic appeal
  • marketing strategies
  • fan engagement
  • digital media
  • community involvement
  • economic impact
  • local economy
  • global economy
  • infrastructure investments
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