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the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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According to the
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The
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 graph below provides key information about
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
participants
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 for different
activites
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activities
 at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. on one hand,
film
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the film
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club
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start
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started
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 with about 65
participants
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 from 2000 till 2010 has
an
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apply
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 60 continued by
increase
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an increase
the increase
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 in 2015 , 2020
nearly
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to nearly
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 68
participants
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,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 the table tennis
start
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started
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 with 18 in 2000
however
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 the
numper
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number
change
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changed
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it
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apply
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in
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from
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 2005 to 20
participants
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 , from 2010 till 2020 dramatic increase around 55
participants
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.
on the other hand
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 ,
martial
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the martial
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club
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start
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started
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 with around 38
continued
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and continued
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 by winding till 2020
it
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apply
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stops
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stopped
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nearly
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with nearly
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in
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apply
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the same
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participants
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number of participants
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 start in , the martial
club
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 does not has a bigger change , the Amateur
dramatics
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start
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started
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 with about 28 from 2005 till 2020
has
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had
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 a dramatic
deicrease
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decrease
 to 5
participants
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, the first year of
musical
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the musical
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 in 2005 after that the
participants
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grown
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grew
have grown
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 till 2020 to nearly 19
participants
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.
overall
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 the graph shows that , the shows increase
film
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in film
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club
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clubs
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,
musical
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musicals
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 and table tennis , more over the activity shows down fall
the
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in the
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 Amateur ,
also
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 the martial arts the same number start the same in the end
..
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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