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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia 🇦🇺 from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the figure of
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travelers
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travellers
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 from three countries—the United Kingdom, the United States, and Japan—who visited
Australia
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 in 1995 and 2005, and the line chart shows trends in
travel
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 styles each year. Both charts show significant fluctuations. In 1995, the highest number of visitors to
Australia
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 were Japanese
people
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, at around 1.4
million
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.
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 was followed by British
people
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, at 800,000, and visitors from the United States, at around 500,000. Ten years later, in 2005, the figure
of
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Australia
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's tourists changed significantly. There was an upward
trend
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 in the number of tourists from the United Kingdom, increasing to 1.4
million
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,
as well as
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 in
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travelers
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travellers
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 from the United States.
However
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, there was a downward
trend
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 for Japanese
people
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. The number of Japanese tourists who
traveled
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travelled
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 to
Australia
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 dropped dramatically to 1
million
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.
Additionally
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, the most popular type of
travel
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 in 1995 was backpacking. More than 1.5
million
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travelers
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travellers
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 from those three countries backpacked to
Australia
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, and
this
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trend
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 rose dramatically to almost 2.5
million
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people
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 in 2000.
Nevertheless
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, the
trend
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 of backpacking
travel
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 decreased surprisingly in 2005.
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, resort stays increased substantially, from around 250,000 in 1995 to about 1
million
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 in 2005.
To sum up
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,
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travelers
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travellers
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 to
Australia
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 from the UK and
US
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the US
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 increased from 1995 to 2005, but those from Japan decreased. Backpacking was a popular type of
travel
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 from 1995 to 2000. After that, its popularity decreased in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travelers, australia, travel, people, million, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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