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Writing Samples
Band 1

1.Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that many individuals believe that
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 of time and money to
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 it is a commonly held
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 that important to protect unique types of
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 that. In my opinion, I consider
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crucial
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 our world.
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 with, we must protect injured and
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animals
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, injured birds mostly suffer if one of their wings
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, a Cheus kind of lion is very rare and around 12 lions around the world In conclusion, despite people having different
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coherence and cohesion
The introduction should clearly present your stance on the issue. Try to vary sentence structures and avoid using incomplete sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is logically structured, leading to a more coherent argument.
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When providing examples, make sure they are specific and detailed. This will strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread your essay for grammar and spelling errors to improve clarity and professionalism.
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Your essay mentions the importance of protecting wild animals, showing an understanding of the topic.
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You attempted to give examples to support your argument, which is commendable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Intrinsic value
  • Ecological balance
  • Conservation efforts
  • Endangered species
  • Sustainable resource management
  • Habitat preservation
  • Eco-tourism
  • Job creation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Allocated resources
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Educational initiatives
  • Future generations
  • Wildlife protection
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