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The maps bellow show a science Park in 2008 and the same Park today.

The maps bellow show a science Park in 2008 and the same Park today.
The map illustrates how a science
park
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 has changed from 2008 until today.
Overall
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, the
park
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 has developed during the period. The size of green areas has been decreased,
whereas
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 new constructions related to transport have been built. In the northeast of the
park
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, a grassland has been demolished, and a research and development
centre
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 has been constructed. A reception area next to
offices
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 has been replaced with a university hub. Another interesting change is that the IT
centre
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 in the south has been converted
to
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into
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 an innovation
center
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centre
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. Grasslands in the
centre
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 have been knocked down
due to
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 expanding the area of cyber security. Looking at transportation facilities, a new station has been introduced in the middle of the railway. The car
park
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 located in the
centre
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 of the science
park
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 has been reduced, and
in
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on
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 the east side of the
park
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, a new bus stop has been constructed. Cycle paths beside roads and paths for connecting facilities have been added.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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