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the diagram shows how instant noodles are manufatured

the diagram shows how instant noodles are manufatured
The figure illustrates the
process
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 of
noodles
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 manufactured.
Overall
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, the
noodles
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process
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 comprised of 8 steps.
Firstly
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, they
storage
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stored
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 the flour in silos
then
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, they mixed
up
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it up
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 with water and oil after that, the dough sheets continued
there
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their
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 way through
roller
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the roller
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 until it reaches the knife that divide the dough into strips shape. Later, they reshaped the dough into discs and
cook
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cooked
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 them using oil
then
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dry
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dried
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 those
noodles
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 discs by only using the roller to move them into
this
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process
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. The
noodles
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 factories use special
kind
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kinds
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 of cups made for them to contain their
noodles
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.
Moreover
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, they added dried vegetables and spices.
Lastly
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, the labelling
process
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 and sealing of the
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noodles
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noodle
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 cups
contains
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contain
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 information about the factory
who
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that
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 made
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this noodle
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these noodles
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, calories and the ingredients of the
noodles
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 cup.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, noodles with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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