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The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
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The pie charts below illustrate the distribution of the world’s
water
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,
while
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 the bar chart represents the use of
water
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 in
agriculture
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, domestic, and industrial sectors in three different countries (Egypt, Saudi Arabia, and Canada).
Overall
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, global
water
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 has the highest percentage of saltwater,
whereas
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 freshwater consists mostly of ice and glaciers.
It is clear that
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 Egypt and Saudi Arabia use
water
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 mainly for
agriculture
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, but in Canada,
water
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 is primarily used for industry. With regards to the amount of global
water
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, saltwater makes up the highest percentage, accounting for 97%, compared to freshwater, which is 3%. In the case of freshwater, ice and glaciers have the largest proportion, which is 79%, followed by groundwater and surface
water
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 at 20% and 1% respectively. In terms of
water
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 usage,
it is clear that
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 Egypt and Saudi Arabia have a similar pattern of
water
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 consumption in
agriculture
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, domestic, and industrial use at around 80%, 15%, and 10% each.
On the other hand
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, in Canada, the usage of
water
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 for industry is 80%,
while
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 usage for
agriculture
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 and domestic purposes remains around 10% each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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