Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, it is argued by some people that
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should be taught to reuse materials at school,
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others believe that
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need to know how to recycle waste at home. In
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essay, I will look into both views and give my own opinion on the matter in detail. On the one hand, it is easy to conduct some lessons for teachers on how to recycle waste.
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, it might be said that
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are naturally curious and teachers definitely know how to attract kids’ attention in way of explaining to them about reusing
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disposal materials.
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, almost every education system has special subjects like
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biology, zoology or other subjects where the youngsters may explore more about the nature at scheduled programs.
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to say, they should be familiar with how it is crucial to recycle and experienced teachers have
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, there is an argument that
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parents should take responsibility in explaining to their kids about reused materials.
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, they spend much more time with them and
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step always starts from an environment where little ones live.
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, a countless time we witnessed that
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when
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try to reflect on their family members’
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kind of connection will be a key step for the young people
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if their parents will encourage their young ones to recycle home waste constantly. In conclusion,
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, it is a common belief that the best place to educate
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about recycling is school,
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, personally I think only parents should urge their kids to
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them in a daily case.

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Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction is clear, but it can be improved by providing a clearer outline of the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
Task Achievement
The conclusion has some good elements, but the wording could be improved for clarity. Consider rephrasing to better express your personal opinion.
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Ensure that all points made in the paragraphs are supported by examples. While there are examples present, they could be more relevant and specified to strengthen the argument.
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The essay addresses both perspectives, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your use of a range of vocabulary and grammatical structures is commendable and contributes positively to your overall band score.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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