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The two maps below show a park in Canada before and after a renovation project.

The two maps below show a park in Canada before and after a renovation project.
The
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 maps provide key information about the changes made to a
park
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 in Canada between 1995 and 2015
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, the
park
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 experienced a significant improvement, with the introduction of new facilities and routes aimed at improving accessibility and visitor experience.
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 the natural features
such
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 as lake, mountain and waterfall remained the same, several man-made features were added. In 1995, the
park
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 was relatively simple, consisting of a marina on the lake, a small information
center
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 near the river, a single
park
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 area to the east, and a campsite to the west. A road provided access from 25
highway
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 to the central parts of the
park
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. By 2015, a notable transformation had occurred. A café was constructed near the campsite,
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new shuttle bus route was introduced, looping through the central parts of the
park
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 and stopping at two newly built bus stops. A network of walking and biking trails was
also
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 added, connecting the campsite, café, and
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marina. Meanwhile, the information
center
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 was relocated next to the café, and the road system was extended slightly to enhance accessibility.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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