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More and more plastic is polluting cities, countryside and oceans. What are the problems caused by plastic waste? What measures should be taken to solve it? (Ulvi)

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Today,
plastic
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 has contaminated different areas more than in the past.
This
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 essay will explore the problems raised by
plastic
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 pollutants and try to find solutions to tackle these issues. First of all,
plastic
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 waste can cause the loss of biodiversity. To elaborate, after some time it creates poisonous
cheamicals
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chemicals
 under the soil and these chemicals have
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 impact on plants. Some plants, especially endangered species,
extinct
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due to
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 toxic substances.
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, in countries like Indonesia and the Philippines, mangrove forests are facing
decline
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a decline
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 because of the growing amount of
plastic
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 waste accumulating in coastal zones. To address
this
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 problem governments should take measures. They can limit the use of
this
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 type of pollutants or they can fine people who pollute
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nature. Another serious issue stemming from
plastic
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 litter is economic
damages
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damage
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for
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to
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 the tourism industry. In most cases, people prefer to visit clean destinations. If some places are filled with
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, tourists will not go to these countries,
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as
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and as
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 a
result
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result,
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 there will be
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the tourism economy.
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, in the Maldives, one of the popular
touristic
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tourist
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 destinations,
plastic
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 pollution has caused some tourists to give up their trips, which has hurt the reputation of local resorts and led to fewer visitors. To combat
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 problem, governments and charities should raise awareness of people
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by
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the
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organizing some projects. They can
organzie
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organize
organise
 some events which show the impact of
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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 on
economy
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the economy
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. In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned points into account,
plastic
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 litter can bring about some problems,
such
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 as the destruction of plants and negative consequences for
economy
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the economy
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 and governments can solve these problems with some punishments or social events.

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task achievement
While your essay identifies key problems related to plastic waste, consider elaborating on your solutions to make them more comprehensive. For example, discuss specific governmental policies or community initiatives that could be implemented.
coherence and cohesion
To enhance the logical flow of your essay, ensure that ideas transition smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words more effectively could help to clarify the relationships between your points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to include a wider range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance the overall quality of your writing. This can also help in making your arguments more persuasive.
task achievement
You have successfully identified significant problems caused by plastic waste and provided relevant examples to support your claims, particularly discussing biodiversity and the tourism industry.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively summarize your main points, showing a clear structure in the essay.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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