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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the developed countries
offer
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 free high school
education
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 to all children,
thus
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 achieving
100
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% literacy rate unlike in developing countries. In light of the above success, many are raising
voices
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their voices
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 to make higher
education
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 free for all
students
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, enabling poor
students
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 to get university degrees without any financial stress.
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 it may seem a grand favour to
students
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,
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
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 a step may be detrimental to the quality of
education
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. So, I firmly disagree with the perspective of free
education
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to
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for
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 all, as I believe it will have more adverse effects, outweighing the benefits that it offers.
FIrst
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First
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 of all, course fees are
the
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apply
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one of the main funding sources for the institutes, as significant funds are required to run daily operations, operate modern hi-tech labs, and pay
salaries
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the salaries
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 of professors. Universities
also
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 spend a lot of budget on
reasearch
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research
 and development, making
it
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them
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 innovation hubs of the country. Many of the
modern day
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 innovations have happened in universities,
such
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 as quantum
machanics
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mechanics
 and nanotech advancement. Without course fees,
education
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 hubs will be left devoid of critical funds,
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 fully dependent on governments for grants.
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 will hamper not only the quality of
education
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 but
also
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 the research and development. To address the cause of poor
students
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 not getting
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to study, there are numerous
way
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 to resolve
this
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.
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, many colleges
offer
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 scholarships to needy
students
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.
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, they
tie-up
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tie up
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 with banks to
offer
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students
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 loans at attractive interest rates that can be paid after the completion of
course
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the course
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. With these interventions,
universites
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universities
 are able to run independently,
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 serving the needs
for
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of
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 all
students
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 with diverse financial backgrounds. In conclusion,
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, offering free
education
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 to all pupils may seem a good idea, there are inherent disadvantages for colleges,
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 as lack of finances and dependence on governments. A better solution would be to
offer
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 grants and loans to poor pupils
,
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while
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 charging from well-to-do
students
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure to maintain a clear logical structure throughout the essay, with distinct paragraphs representing each main idea. This will enhance readability and clarity.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments, which can strengthen your points and make your essay more persuasive.
language accuracy
Pay attention to minor spelling errors (e.g., 'reasearch' should be 'research' and 'machanics' should be 'mechanics') that might distract readers from your arguments; proofreading can help catch these errors.
task achievement
Your essay effectively presents a clear opinion and argues against the idea of free university education, which demonstrates a strong response to the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
You have structured your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an understanding of essay format and progression of ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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