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Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology, which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way. Do you agree or disagree?

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denying
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advancement
advancements
 in technology
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which
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which
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prevent
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prevent
 and solve crimes in an easier way In
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a decline
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 in some of the
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crime
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crimes
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 that the
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people
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 as shop theft .
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hand
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crimes
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 increasing due
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 development of technology
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 think that
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technology helps our life become
more
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easier and
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helped
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helps
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a lot
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crime
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crimes
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been
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heard or seen on
the
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apply
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social media for
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example
 if someone
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a shope
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shope
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shoppe
 lifting the police will the man or the
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woman
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 that
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shift
 the shop and what she or he stole and bring his face by video recording in the screen of the computer or if someone is trying to steal your
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identity
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defend
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something
 in market or fuel station , of
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course
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technology
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thieves
maybe
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may be
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 using it to cover their trace
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 as hacking maybe stole your
banck
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bank
back
 account by sending
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sacm
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scam
 website without you
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 notice and take all of your money and uses
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VPN
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their
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i
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 strongly
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
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technology
technolgy
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technology helps
helpd
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helped
help
helps
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make
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prevent
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the
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crimes
pervent
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prevent
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didnt
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didn't
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apply
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technology
technolgy
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technology
 in
crime
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 to define the killer by his
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DNA
dna
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DNA
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 by putting it on
computer
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the computer
a computer
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 from a hire sample or blood

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grammar
Make sure to improve grammar and spelling as they affect the clarity of your ideas.
structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction. Consider stating your position more explicitly at the beginning of your essay.
content
Expand on your ideas and provide more detailed examples to back up your opinions. This will strengthen your argument.
example
You provide some relevant examples of how technology affects crime, such as video recordings and DNA analysis.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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