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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The graph shows
the
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information about the expenditure of
two
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countries
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is
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France
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 and the
UK
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, on consumer goods in 2010, including five categories: cars,
computers
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, books,
perfume
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, and cameras.
Overall
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, the cars are the highest figure in the
two
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countries
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, the
number
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 of
UK
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 goods has trended higher than
France
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, except for
two
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 categories are
computers
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 and
perfume
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. Regarding cars,
this
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 is the highest
number
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 in both
countries
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, and the biggest in figure of
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UK
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the UK
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 with 450,000
pounds
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, in
France
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, it has slightly decreased and reached 400,000
pounds
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. In the category of
computers
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, which is the figure that has the least difference between the
two
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countries
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, approximately 350,000
pounds
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 in the
UK
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 and 370,000
pounds
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 in
France
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.
Moreover
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, the books category
also
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 has a difference between the
two
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countries
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, with 402,000
pounds
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 in the
UK
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 and the
number
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 of books in
France
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 lower
approximately
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by approximately
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 100,000
pounds
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. Regarding cameras,
this
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 is the biggest difference, with 352,000
pounds
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 in the
UK
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 and lower than 200,000
pounds
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 in
France
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. In
two
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 categories
consist
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Computers
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 and
Perfume
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, the
number
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of
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in
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France
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 has a trend higher than
the
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in the
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UK
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. Regarding
computers
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, it is one of the highest numbers in all
countries
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, with 370,000 and 350,000
pounds
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 respectively.
With
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In
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 the
perfume
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 category, it is the lowest
number
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 in both
countries
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, with 350,000
pounds
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 in
France
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 and 147,000
pounds
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 in the
UK
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, countries, france, uk, computers, perfume, number, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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