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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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The table below indicates the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in
four
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countries
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 between 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in these
countries
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 in 2006.
Overall
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, the United
States
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 had the largest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in
four
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countries
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 in 2003 and 2006.
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New Zealand is the
country
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 with the smallest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in 2003 and 2006.
However
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,
this
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country
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 had the largest
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in
these
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this country
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country
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 in 2006 and the smallest is the United
States
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.
To begin
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 with, two
countries
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 had the largest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in
four
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countries
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 : the United
States
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 and the United Kingdom.
Firstly
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, the United
States
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 had the largest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 with 577,000
workers
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 in 2003 and it increased to 678,000
workers
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 in 3 years after. But the United
States
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 had the smallest
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006 with only 2,3. Continuing with the United Kingdom,
this
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country
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 had the largest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 after the United
States
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 with 137,000
workers
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 in 2003 and in 2006 it increased double to 266,000
workers
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;
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 but the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006 is so low with only 4,4.
To the
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last
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 two
countries
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,
first is
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 Australia with 152,000 temporary migrant
workers
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 in 2003 and 3 years later it grew
up
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to 219,000; the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 is larger than the United
States
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 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom with 10,7.
Lastly
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, we have New Zealand with the lowest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 with 65,000
workers
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 in 2003 and
it
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rising
up
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to 87,000 in 2006; the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 in
this
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country
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 is the largest in
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four
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the four
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countries
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 with 21,1.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, four, countries, people, states, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 13 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Temporary migrant workers
  • Labor mobility
  • Statistical data
  • Insights
  • Trends
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Economic growth
  • Demand for labor
  • Immigration policies
  • Disparities
  • Concentration
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consequences
  • Economic impact
  • Cultural integration
  • Social services
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