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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measure and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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In the past we did not have global warming, nowadays, we keep hearing about
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global warming and have his
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to
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 the Planet, many people argue
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 global warming
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the
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modern industries. I will explain in
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of
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 global
waming
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warming
alnog
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along
 with its issues. There
is
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 so many reasons to
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 global warming, but I will focus on the most common cause. CO2
emitions
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emissions
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, every machine moving
in
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 earth burn fuel from oil, starting with
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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, trains, cars and motorcycles, not
stoping
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 trucks. Governments can
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to
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 the cities to reduce CO2, Example cars are prohibiated from the city so
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people will walk,
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 scooter bycle or
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 the electric train for
transportaion
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transportation
 inside
city
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 and it will gain
a green cities
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a green city
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 without CO2. CO2 is the scale to understand the proportion of global warming.
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, since most
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the
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people using their own
cars
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 it will increase day by day because the population increasing.
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, using public transportation will incline CO2 in the
atmosphare
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atmosphere
,
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 way can individuals contribute
reduce
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 global warming in the air. In conclusion, global warming can
brings
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 disaster to the earth it will melt Ice in
multiable
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multiple
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in
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will
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increase water and
leads
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 to
hit
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 the ground like Tsonami.
Morover
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Moreover
,
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Icy animals will die
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 global warming which
is make
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 them
disappare
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disappear
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grammar
Improve sentence structure and grammatical accuracy. Ensure that subject-verb agreement is correct, and review punctuation use. For example, 'we did not have global warming' could be better phrased as 'global warming was not a significant concern in the past.'
content
Expand on ideas with more specific examples and explanations. For instance, you mentioned various modes of transportation; adding statistics or results from studies could strengthen your argument.
vocabulary
Make sure to check spelling and vocabulary usage. Words like 'emitions' should be corrected to 'emissions', and 'creat' to 'create'. This will enhance clarity.
task achievement
You clearly identify the causes of global warming and suggest measures individuals and governments can take, which is a relevant response to the prompt.
content
Your points about alternative transportation methods indicate a thoughtful approach to reducing CO2 emissions, showing an understanding of the implications of personal choices.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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