The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.

The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.
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In general,
according to
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the bar
chart
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Japan was the country which consumed more
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meal, around 55-70kg.
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Vietnam
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and China were the ones that sowed the lower consumption among the six Asian countries. Looking into the details Cambodia and The Philippines represented similar consumption of
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food during
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period of time, nearly 38kg.
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, the intake of
sea food
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seafood
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in Japan was the highest
one
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among
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this
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years
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, about 55 to 70kg.
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,
Vietnam
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and China had equivalent rates in those years,
however
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, the latter ended the period being higher than the former. The intake of food from the sea in
Manmar
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Myanmar
in 2002 was practically the same as it was in
Vietnam
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in
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this
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year.
On the other hand
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, Myanmar outraced China and
Vietnam
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consumption
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in the
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following years reaching 50kg in 2010.

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