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The table below provides information about mill< production in Australia in millions of litres.

The table below provides information about mill< production in Australia in millions of litres.
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The table provides key information about Australian milk
production
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 across the year, divided into two periods, from 2000 to 2001 and from 2010 to 2010
Overall
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, it’s clear from the table that
production
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 increases gradually in both periods until
October
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.
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, the highest
production
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 occurred in
October
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.
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, the reduction in the number of milk started in December, and continued till the end of the timeframe. From 2000 to 2001, a sharp climb started from the beginning of the year, with 590 million litres in July, and 830 in September,
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production
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 reached a peak in
October
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 at 920.
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, these numbers begin to decline from November to May, reaching 590. In June,
production
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 rose noticeably to 610. Meanwhile, from 2010 to 2011, the
production
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 numbers were the same in July for both years, but there was a significant increase in the numbers compared to the previous period, peaking in
October
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, with 1350 units. After that, the reduction started until the units reached 590 in June.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, october with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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