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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line bar illustrates the
number
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 of
thefts
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 of automobiles in Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada over a
period
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 of nine years. The
number
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 is given per 1000 stolen vehicles.
Sveden
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Sweden
 showed the most increase in
robbery
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the robbery
a robbery
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 of
autimobiles
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automobiles
 from 1990 till 1999, though Great Britain had the most
thefts
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 over the whole
period
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 with some decline and incline.
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 Canada and France showed stable beginning and end numbers with some small fluctuation. Great Britain with the most
thefts
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 over the
period
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,
starteted
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started
1990
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in 1990
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 with around 18
thousand
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thefts
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. After
that
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that,
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 it increased to 20
thousand
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 till 1991 and fell back to the beginning value in 1993. From there on it reached
it
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its
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 second peak around 1996 with again around 20
thousand
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thefts
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 after falling under the initial value with around 17
thousand
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autobomile
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automobile
automobiles
thefts
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at the end
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 of the
oberserving
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observing
period
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. Sveden
on the contrary
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 started with only 9
thousand
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thefts
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 in 1990 and almost doubled its
number
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 over the
observring
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observing
period
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 to approximately 15
thousand
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thefts
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. France started 1990 with the lowest
number
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 of
thefts
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of
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apply
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around 6
thousands
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thousand
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, it showed
to
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apply
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peaks of around 8
thousand
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thefts
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 in the years 1991 and 1995,
after
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this
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 it declined to the final
number
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 of again 6
thousand
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thefts
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 in 1999.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 Canada showed an initial decrease
of
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in
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thefts
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 beginning with around 7,7
thousand
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 in 1990 and ending with its lowest
number
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 in 1993 with around 5
thousand
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 vehicle
thefts
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 slowly growing
till
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to
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 6
thousand
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thefts
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 in the final year 1999.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thefts, period, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theft rate
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • vehicle theft
  • per thousand vehicles
  • decade
  • steady increase
  • steep decline
  • comparative analysis
  • noteworthy changes
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