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Band 3

some people say newspapers are the best source of news but others say that the internet is better. discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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there is a debate over which method is better for
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. I, in turn, believe that newspapers
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 the best source to read important
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 people can avoid misunderstanding. When
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 or something else before it is printed and released It is
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 by the state and naturally there will be no fake information.
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 of people, who prefer
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 immediately, and they always bring and
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 hand, and they choose the easy way, just open any channel with up-to-date
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, without wasting g time and money. in conclusion, I can say that all
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 good, but
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newspaper
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, owing to we can escape being deceived and always can trust printed
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language
Be careful with grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to improve clarity. Some sentences are unclear due to awkward phrasing.
task response
Avoid vague language and be more specific when stating opinions. Clearly articulate your argument.
coherence
Use a wider range of connectives to enhance the flow of your essay. This will help with coherence.
coherence
Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing your main points and reiterating your opinion more effectively.
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You introduced both sides of the argument, showing an awareness of different perspectives on the topic.
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You made a clear personal opinion statement, which is an important aspect of IELTS essays.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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