Is the pursuit of happiness a sustainable goal in the long run?

Is the pursuit of
happiness
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a sustainable goal in the long run? In
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I will give the definition of
the
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apply
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happiness
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and give my answer
for
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the question. On the one hand, everyone
want
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to be happy and want to relax.
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, they study a lot and
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hard
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achieve
the
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happiness
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.
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, they don't know the value of their health. So, they would be ill and eventually die one day. From my point of view, everybody must live without any hard
work
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and they must understand the value of their health. Being healthy is more than
happiness
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.
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, people can earn money without doing any hard
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. They can earn more money if they study more. So, they willn't
work
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hard but they would earn more money by
uning
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using
tuning
their agility. My neighbour's son was clever and he had studied a lot. One day a group of strange people came to his house and they asked him to
work
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for them. After a week he go to
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England. Now he is the most reach person in my village
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, he
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work
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hard.
To conclude
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,
pursuit
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the pursuit
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of
happiness
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is
stable
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the stable
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goal and people can achieve that by studying a lot
on
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about
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themselves.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay. It helps the reader understand the structure of your argument.
task achievement
Work on clearly defining 'happiness' at the beginning of your essay. This sets a good foundation for your argument.
task achievement
Try to expand on your ideas and provide more specific examples to support your claims. This will make your arguments stronger and more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your grammar and phrasing. For instance, instead of 'to work for achieve the happiness', you could say 'to achieve happiness'.
content
You demonstrate a good understanding of the topic by discussing different perspectives on happiness.
structure
Your essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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