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The maps below describe an area before and after the construction of a hydroelectric power plant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below describe an area before and after the construction of a hydroelectric power plant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates a space in the past and later the production of a hydroelectric power
plant
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.
Overall
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, because a hydroelectric
Dam
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 was built, it created many transformations. In the North the
plant
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, river, and farmland are changed by
lake
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a lake
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 and hotel but the mountains
is
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are
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 maintained. In the South of maps, it had many variations,
national
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the national
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 park and historic castle were replaced by power
plant
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 and transmission towers
consequently
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 the bridge and village
was
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were
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 kept. When the hydroelectric
dam
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 was constructed, it made thrust to develop for here. One of the changes that we can notice
that
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is that
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 the
fork
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forked
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 river was varied by
lake
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the lake
a lake
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 so it made a new profession
is
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in
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aquaculture
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an aquaculture
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 in the lake.
Besides
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, we can easily see that farmland
was
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has
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 disappeared since the hydroelectric
dam
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 lost water source flow in farmland, so it was modified by a hotel. Despite having many modifications,
forest
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forests
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 and mountains are maintained. Thanks to the appearance of the hydroelectric
dam
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, it
also
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 made shifts in the South of maps.
Firstly
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,
national
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the national
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 park and historic castle
was
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were
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 varied by power
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plant
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plants
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 and transmission towers because
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric
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dam
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 was constructed, creating an electric course.
As having
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Having
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electric
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an electric
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 course, powers
plant
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 transfer station from
electric
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the electric
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 course to transmission towers.
Besides
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, having many conversions, we still have
village
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a village
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 and bridge
are kept
Verb problem
apply
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plant, dam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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