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The two plans below show the City library in 2004 and 2014. Summarise the infomwtion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate how the layout of the City Library changed between 2004 and 2014.
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, the library underwent significant renovations, especially in the southern and eastern sections. The
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 shop and art gallery were combined and relocated, new facilities
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 as a café and a computer/media
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 were introduced, and the general collection was expanded with additional media. In 2004, the layout featured four sections within the general collection: fiction, non-fiction, children’s books, and magazines. The southern area housed an art gallery, a
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 store, and a separate
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 for academic journals. A reference
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 and a reception desk were located centrally, and the main entrance was positioned on the western side. By 2014, the layout had been modernized. The academic journals and reference
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 were merged into a single space. A new Movies and Computer Games section was added to the general collection area. Meanwhile, the art gallery and
gift
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 store were combined into one unit and moved to the southeastern corner. A café was
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 constructed next to them. In the southwestern corner, a computer and media
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 replaced the original
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 shop.
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, an outdoor performance area was created on the eastern side, improving the cultural and recreational function of the library.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider adding a brief conclusion that summarizes the changes mentioned. This would enhance the overall flow and provide a stronger ending to your report.
Task Achievement
While the details provided are generally good, further comparisons between the two maps could be made clearer, discussing the implications of the changes, not just detailing them.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to organize your paragraphs in a way that smoothly transitions between the 2004 and 2014 layouts, perhaps even using subheadings to guide the reader through the changes.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively highlights significant changes made over the ten-year period, showcasing a clear understanding of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of the essay is logical, with a clear introduction and a focus on the main features of the library's layout.

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