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Band 1

Many people today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from University in their home country. why is this ?do the advantages is turned outweight the disadvantages.

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In recent years, the topic of
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 and
work
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 another country has become increasingly important
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of
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for
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people
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. One of the
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influencing
work
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benfits
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benefits
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contries
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countries
. another important point is that
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live
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. the
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work
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another
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in another
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 country learning culture and new
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 and community
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building
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connections
.
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,
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research
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benfits
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benefits
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 salary and best learning
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skills
, service
matter
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 and many growth and
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bulding
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buildings
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car
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. in
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conclusion
, the many
people
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 choosing
live
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 and
work
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 in other
country
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countries
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 remain
curcail
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crucial
curtail
that
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and
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 require
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 research and attention.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states the reasons why people choose to live and work in another country. Also, mention the advantages and disadvantages directly in your introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph. This helps with readability and guides the reader through your ideas.
task achievement
Consider developing your points further, providing specific examples for each advantage or disadvantage discussed. This will strengthen your argument and help achieve a higher score.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling errors to improve the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Proofreading your work can help catch these mistakes before submission.
task achievement
You've identified relevant aspects of living and working abroad such as cultural learning and personal growth, which shows understanding of the topic.
task achievement
The idea of building community connections highlights the social benefits of working abroad, which is an important point in the discussion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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