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Band 4.5

: All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades, To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is an undeniable fact that learning an abroad
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 has always been a debatable issue. In my opinion, I am completely in favour of
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 statement, that children should learn foreign communication skills in the beginning period of studies. In
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 essay, I am going to explain the causes why it is important to
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 knowledge of
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language
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To begin
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 with, Schools should teach English subject to every
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 from starting grade
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 since it is a global
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, and It will help to build the base of every person .
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, individuals with good communication skills can compete with other people on
international
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an international
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 level.
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, recently, there was a debate competition between
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 schools at
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the international
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 level and the person who won the gold medal was
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apply
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one from
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an asian
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asian
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Asian
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countries
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country
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 which shows that having great
communications
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communication
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 skills helps you to achieve heights of glory.
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, In
recent
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the recent
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era
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, people
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 to get a job in their own country, so with the ongoing trend many students go to different countries after completing their secondary education, and the main thing which they require to
fulfill
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is
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a langage
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langage
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language
 test. Most of the citizens took help from some learning institutions to pass the test, but if
school
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the school
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 will provide the course to children from the starting period they can learn from
their
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there
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, It is necessary for students to learn
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language
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, from the starting time of school to explore the world and achieve something big in life.

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task achievement
Your introduction effectively states your position and gives a clear direction for the essay, but try to enhance it by providing a brief overview of the points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
The body paragraphs need clearer topic sentences to guide the reader through your arguments. Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea and is clearly connected to your thesis.
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Try to provide more relevant examples to support your points. For instance, when discussing the importance of communication skills, you could mention specific job opportunities that require them.
coherence and cohesion
Watch for grammatical errors and sentence structure, as they can disrupt the flow of your writing. Proofreading your essay can help catch these issues before submission.
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Your strong opinion on the topic is clearly communicated, and your enthusiasm about the importance of learning a foreign language is evident.
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You included relevant examples, like the debate competition, which help illustrate your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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