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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities whether they only know a few people in their area. Advantages and disadvantages of living in small communities?

In the modern era, most
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the
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people are living in cities, but in the past wasn't like that. In fact, we are living in
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 period of time,
where
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 people moving
in
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 these cities. Living in large cities not always give the
opportunuty
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opportunity
 to
met
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 other people.
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, small villages
gives
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this
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oppurtunity
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opportunity
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especcially
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especially
 the neighbours. In
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would
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 discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of living in small communities and I
would
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 give my opinion
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 discussion.
Fisrtly
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, living in small communities is an
advantages
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, because everyone knows everyone and if something
happen
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 the community is ready to act
immediatly
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immediately
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, knowing each other

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coherence and cohesion
Work on making clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader better.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points; this can greatly enhance your argument.
language use
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammar, as errors can distract from the overall message.
task achievement
You have a clear intention to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of small communities.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction outlines the essay's purpose well and engages the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tight-knit
  • support systems
  • low crime rates
  • limited access
  • employment opportunities
  • pressure
  • lack of privacy
  • cooperation
  • shared community values
  • closed-mindedness
  • homogeneous
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