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The two maps below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summaris the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summaris the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate how the town of Denham has changed since 1986.
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, what stands out from the maps is that green areas have been cut down and residential places have been constructed. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the farmlands have been demolished to make
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way for
houses
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. The areas of the gardens in the middle of the town have been reduced and the large
houses
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 located in
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 area
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 been replaced with retirement homes. With regard to residential buildings, the number of
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houses
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increased along the road which goes to the bridge and new paths have been constructed which are connected with the previous road.
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, new
houses
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 been built at the paths. Another interesting change in Denham is that the shops next to the post office have been eliminated and the the building of the primary school has been expanded.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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